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depictions by the rule of thirds; descriptions mostly freestyle words
Only OM
Certainly not violins and strings
could be doves cooing
even the sound of one hand clapping*
against another’s; pat-a-caking
with the baker’s man or echoing
that indian love call highland fling
the unmistakable thud of falling
the cat who walks alone crossing
paths with another eschewing
company, light fantasy tripping
up and down the fingerpicking
fretboard of the real thing
a queen enthroned with king
the summer country wedding
summons up a certain resonating
polish to the gold or copper ring
– for sure love is sacred sounding
without the God blaspheming
no oh my! thunderbolt exclaiming
mm hmm love intones only OM
© Laura Granby 2016
*classic zen riddle or koan to lead the mind into silence
Walter @DVerse asks us to consider: the sound of love
12 Comments on “Only OM”
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You’ve made this prompt “sing”. A brilliant monorhyme with the “ing” endings!
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loving singing 😉 what a great prompt from you
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Spectacular!! Brava!
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muchas gracias
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Oh this is splendid.. one of your very best. The list of examples building a narrative and the mix of end-stop and enjambment gives a perfect pace for the pull-push of a love story…
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many thanks Bjorn for generous and thoughtful comment – wanted to avoid the heart stopping element more than the rush of love in this rhythm!
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Bravo!! This is amazing!! ❤️
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always generous with your time and comments Sanaa ❤
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Specially like the last stanza Laura. Your poem is filled with sounds!!!
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had fun exploring the pitch and toss of love Grace 😉
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I like all your list of sounds … and the culmination.
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thank you Rosemary – that’s where all the sounds seemed to lead
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