in a tangle of axons thoughts under
take a ramble through jungle dense dendrons
there by the bridge I place a lamp, under
lighting nameless forms like moths in a glare
to be catalogued word for word and under
written in the warm wavy undergrowth
I dispel just enough mystery to under
score a coelacanth as chameleon sideshow
sick with greed a heron’s swollen under
belly ruptures in piscatorial plasma, landing a fish
with doe-eyed cony contours and deep in the under
croft a shy, striped ibis steps out of the underworld
In a quandary with MLM’s ‘double choice’ writing prompt #175 but undertook to use, instead of my collage, only her phantasmal animals image which she made here
Truly brilliant take on the prompt Laura!
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your image fired the imagination [and thanks for the deep dream generator link]
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The green is how it was previously. It is pink now but Sam does plan to build a kitchen sofa (are they called that in English? The first image has a kitchen sofa which belonged to the former owners and they took it with them obviously. Ours would be a different style but similar concept a bench with a cushion and storage underneath) and it will have soft green cushions so we do plan on incorporating some green into it.
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good taste! a fave colour combo 🙂
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I’m impressed that your worked in a coelacanth!
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came across it as a child in a game called ‘Zoo quest’ (David Attenborough) – top points for that card. Now pay as much for the game itself
https://boardgamegeek.com/boardgame/7698/zoo-quest
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Fascinating!
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the windmills of my mind 😛
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coelacanth — thinking of that just the other day. Great surrealistic description of Yves’ world.
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fortunately coelacanth is just about real for now in this world
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truly spectacular; thanks for dropping in at my Monday WRites
much love…
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pleasure shopping with you gillena!
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Oh I do love the assonance in some of the lines.. truly wonderful imagery your acrostics…
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I appreciate learning so much more of poetry with you and DVerse – but are there acrostics? did word slip and repetition to create the under-world
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**blushing** no acrostic… meant ekphrastic
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thank you – had to look it up 😉 you’re a veritable dictionary of terms [how/where did you learn it all]
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I think this term I heard the first time in a comment from a previous bartender at dVerse… Had a prompt on it on toads a while ago.
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http://withrealtoads.blogspot.se/2015/08/weekend-mini-challenge-ekphrasis.html
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Good memory & thanks for that link
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You worked in some unusual words and striking imagery, Laura. Well done.
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there is a place for the unusual lexicon in such a place as this 😉
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Ooo the language in this is so creative, the image madly inspiring! Your ending lines are delicious. Thanks for sharing!
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spot on Stacie -madly inspiring image
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I like the enbambment; it makes for interesting reading.
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enjambment certainly stops that jarring feeling at the end of a line! thank you OM
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I have thoroughly enjoyed this poem multiple times now. I find the repetition of “under” (at the end of every other line) to be very effective. I also enjoyed reading about the endangered coelacanth, although I must confess, the striped ibis is my favorite “character” in this piece. The following phrases grab me every go-round: “in a tangle of axons,”
“jungle dense dendrons,” “chameleon sideshow.”
Thank you for sharing this piece.
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I believe you visited the tiny woods behind my house. It is an underworld of heron, palm, and an open air zoo of traveling wildlife. Nature deserves the finest words, and your piece is filled with them.
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gratifying to find this place actually exists Susie 😉 very nice comment ‘open air zoo of traveling wildlife’ -thank you
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The repetition really works here… interesting!
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a plethora of under words to choose from!
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