the Persian buttercup
convoluted origami on a wispy, wiry stem
petal-packed - and when turbanned twice-over
barely able to brandish the prettiest pre-eminence
to our eulogizing gaze 

precocious pinks or gorgeous gaudy citrus
but surely  floristry's monstrosity for bees
- shall I compare thee to a summer cabbage rose?
even the Bard would pardon the misdirected line
for where this Asian native meets Aegean sea
it inclines more to poppy and anemone
than paper powder-puff

35 thoughts on “powder puff”

1. I love ranunculus – petal-packed they are!

   1. me too though the native forms are magnificently modest

2. Aah, poetry about my favourite flowers and lovely picture to go with it – beautiful.

   1. And I thought of your Friday Flowers when I wrote this …<3
      https://throughalaywomanslens.wordpress.com/2017/12/29/friday-flowers-197/

      1. *blushing* 🙂

3. Wonderful metaphor and, as always, your word play is enchanting!

   1. I really appreciate your encouraging comments Jilly – thank you!

4. Love how you play with phrases and words to describe this flower….

   1. thanks Donna – Ranunculus are so light-hearted!

5. I also like the word play here. Pulls me in, helps me to “see” what you are saying. Great job!

   Elizabeth

   1. finding the meaning in visuals – there’s the trick of it. A great prompt from you – thank you Elizabeth

6. Great imagery – i loved every sense you gave us

   1. What a nice comment – thank you!

7. love your description of this pretty flower, especially after viewing the pictures (I wasn’t familiar with it). Within your lines I especially like “floristry’s monstrosity for bees” 🙂

   1. I think the bees would agree – these doubles hide their centres in origami!

8. Convoluted origami sets this up so well. A wonderfully floral piece.

   1. Many thanks Paul – glad it came across as floral rather than flowery!

9. I so admire the way you have described the flower in the opening stanza – in one complete sentence. Excellent writing.

   1. Really appreciate your words Kerry

10. even the Bard would pardon the misdirected line – I adore that!

    1. Could not help but re-phrase Shakespeare in that moment Margaret

11. Love this especially; “shall I compare thee to a summer cabbage rose?” 💜

    1. It is so like a cabbage rose but “thou art more lovely” – thanks Sanaa

12. I love the phrases ‘convoluted origami on a wispy, wiry stem’ and ‘turbanned twice-over’!

    1. Thank you Kim – it’s not quite how florist’s describe it but the poet takes liberties 😉

13. “our eulogizing gaze” …. Nice!!!

    Thanks for the flower link

    much love…

    1. It was the g’s I enjoyed writing here Gillena!

14. I think ‘turbanned twice-over’ is perfect for the Persian buttercup. This is such a perfect poem.

    1. perfectly lovely comment – thank you!

15. Lovely flower and lovely poem.

    1. thank you Rosemary

16. Your use of words is so beautifully deliberate and artful!

    1. thanks so much Ana – I deliberate for ages!

17. A floral feast! Love the artwork this matches.

    1. Thank you

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