Here I am
How you want me
Not muzzled yet, yet almost dumb
Desires muffled to a throaty croak.
Waist high, and treading water
This belly cooled by all affection
bound and neatly tempered.
Here I am
How you see me
Not quite cowed under the touch
Your hand firm and nearly tender.
Patted like a child, petted stroke by stroke
Till tame. There is a terrible tearing
Limb by limb. A drowning weight.
Here I am
How that leap surprised.
Unforeseen. You failed to watch
The yellow iris flicker. A flame burst
Tunnelling at speed through guts
Tight with Courage. Fierce, bloodied.
Lick those wounds and in each healing scar
Read how I took my leave of us – thus far.
Carrie has offered up this wild photo prompt for our Sunday Muse to get her teeth into
34 thoughts on “Outbreak”
That last line rocked me back on my chair, Laura.
🙂 hope you kept your balance and thanks for a great comment
Yes, those last two lines. More power to the healing-leaving. It does come down to a leaving, doesn’t it.
yes amongst other things, it comes down to feeling strong enough to do so
Losing our wildlife, the beauty and splendor of nature in all its wonder …. horrific to contemplate. ‘Yellow iris flicker’ …. a great description, I saw it.
thanks Helen – we may even have seen it differently
Wow Laura, this is one of your finest! Powerful and soul stirring, as other’s have pointed out, that last line is an amazing closing line!! It is always a pleasure to have you join us at the Muse!
thank you for being so encouraging and for the inspiration you provide to our Sunday group too
That core of wildness, always there, is what I love and respect most in creatures. I so identify with the strong hand that thinks it has tamed us, their surprise when that flame flickers and we rise up. I so resonate with this poem.
animal or person – the analogy is all there
Sooner or later the captor gets sloppy and/or overconfident in their abilities. When I see thus far, my curiosity really gets going!
Your poem has such potency in it.
nicely observed, Lisa – power is a given authority – and can be taken back.
Very intense. From the first stanza till the last, an array of emotions surfaces from the depth of your words. Brilliant!
I am blushing from your fabulous feedback 🙂
A fierce response Laura. Happy Sunday
many thanks Gillena
The proceeding verses were already coiling in my stomach until that flicker–amazing!
glad to hear the emotions came through! – thank you
The final lines are riveting. The “thus far” is telling, and hopefully open-ending.
yes there is a slight opening there Bev
‘You failed to watch/The yellow iris flicker’ – love this line building up to the intensity of the outbreak that follows. Well, loved all of it actually.
thank you for such appreciation
The last two lines, an exclamation to the strength of the entire piece. Wonderful writing!
very nicely observed Susie – thank you
I agree with Carrie, one of your best. The muscles of each stanza bunched tight and ready to explode. Interestingly, I like the first stanza the best. A lot of kinetic energy stored there…
your muscular description is so fitting, a powerful lot of feedback too – much appreciated
It takes some courage and bravery to live… Your words, dive deep picking moments of darkness bringing them to the light. I love it, Laura.
a wonderfully descriptive commentary Marina – thank you x
Thank YOU, Laura, for those moments. 🤗
What a power!
wild will out at the end!
Intense, and mighty poem. Last line rocked me back in my seat.
I could feel that coiled up in the wolf
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