Aquarium

safe in the aquarium - poemmy analyst would have seen a green light
– were it a watery dream;
leaping fish in a passion’s swell
a deep-sea dive over the dam

but it was no waking fancy
Autumn rain, shoals of glitter-ball
frantically feeling a way to the sea;
how still we stood, in thrall to it all
the storm that sent us sheltering there
beat the boundary walls

water everywhere like the poem, a hymn
to land lovers far from peril in the deep
breathing to a two-stroke rhythm
no occasion for snorkel or scuba tank
safe in the aquarium

Polaroid poems – a developing theme of nostalgia with a light-touch and a hint of a smile on past events, real or imagined
– to join with the versifying at Poetry Pantry

30 Comments on “Aquarium

  1. What a wonderful idea -Polaroid poem – the words and image really submerged us in that setting..a brief..magical moment captured in time

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  2. a beautiful setting indeed..”..shoals of glitter-ball / frantically feeling a way to the sea;”..love this…

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    • thank you Sumana – their movements are both sparkling and maniacal – lovely to watch but also witnessing some distress it seems

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  3. We all live in our aquariums yet pity the fish as at Bournemouth! Freedom is relative to the captivity we enjoy. Perhaps this is why we do dangerous things.

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  4. Your poem submerged me in thought,Laura. One to dive into and look at life from a place of safety inside that aquarium! A very interesting form.

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  5. I love that aquarium paradox–the surround of water–and rain as well–and yet total safety and therefore enthrallment. It is an amazing photo!

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  6. I like the dream like language that portrays a non-dream. Wonderfully fluid with great imagery,

    Elizabeth

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  7. This felt like a dream. The therapist, the water, the nostalgia, the danger, then the safety of the fish tank. I like the form. It seems like it mixes reality with some humor.

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  8. i was thinking about a present storm – literally / figuratively.

    is bournemouth in UK? i’ve been to bournemouth once – i liked the place and blog about it before.

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    • the storm is a good metaphor -real or imaginary. And yes Bournemouth is on our Southcoast – literally means mouth of the river (bourne)

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    • indeed – a favourite hymn with an undertow of fear of water!

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