No clue
no word of intention
I thought we'd fallen
into step 
like accidental tourists*
and out of the blue
you thrust the purest green
a gem picked, a ring planned,
My stone setter!
Only in death did you hint
only the day before.

37 thoughts on “Surprise!”

1. What a lovely surprise, Laura, but a hint of sadness at the end.

   1. I almost missed the hint

2. A very touching end… the movement from love into death going so very rapidly. Love it.

   1. thank you Bjorn – so many clues I missed

3. A powerful little poem that really clutches the throat at the end. Nicely crafted.

   1. many thanks for such positive feedback

4. Ohhh……no hint of that sad ending. I like the colours that collaborate in “out of the blue you thrust the purest green”.

   1. thank you Mish and for the prompt

5. Laura, read the book and saw the movie and loved both. The depth of sudden sorrow is keenly felt in your poem. A parting gift that holds such a poignant message.

   1. Thank you Lisa -there are some parallels with the film/book 😉 but not the ending

      1. You’re welcome, Laura.

6. This is both piercingly poignant and beautiful, Laura! Sigh 💜💜

   1. ❤ Sanaa

7. Wow…cleverly constructed…and nicely done, the verse too! A strong finish there, must say..

   1. many thanks Ain for your appreciation

8. The end of the poem struck my heart. How many clues we miss!

   1. indeed – but perhaps it is the best way, after all

9. So much only becomes clear in retrospect. This is very moving Laura. (K)

   1. thank you for being moved Kerfe

10. Powerful and masterfully written.

    1. very nice comment – thank you

11. It’s so compelling, and I love the reference to The Accidental Tourist, my favorite movie. Nice.

    1. a film that evidently speaks to us!

12. The last words are so sad, Laura.

    1. yes it was a shock 😦

       1. Hugs

13. Such a moving little gem, Laura! Life and its subtle hints…sigh!

    1. thank you – these quadrilles give us the chance for little gems as with the ring in the poem

14. I wasn’t expecting that ending, nicely caught by surprise, just as your title.

    1. like life there are lighthearted moments before the crash

15. I love the surprise in this poem.

    1. one much less welcome than the other

       1. yes!

16. My heart plunged at the end. Great poem, Laura!

    Yvette M Calleiro 🙂

    1. as did mine – thank you

17. This shows you how short life can be. Beautiful, Laura.

    1. so true – and fits just 44 words!

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