one for the road

White elder blossom and dog roses hung in the hedges, blank as unwritten paper, and the hot empty road reflected Sunday’s waste and indifference. High sulky summer sucked me towards it”
Laurie Lee ~ As I walked out one Midsummer Morning

I hastened ahead in high exuberance
where an unwritten track left a tired Sunday street
hedgerows infused with flower dispensed a nosegay nuance
wild sighing roses cast petals in the heat

summer birds offering up melliferous melodies
unruffled by our fitful footsteps’ rise and falls
that tapping of your stick discharging dignity
those surreptitious rests in scrutiny of dry stone walls

though omens of ageing waste were unalloyed
half blind I strode, indifferent to the closing episode
now all these byways spread out blank and unemployed
my travels must peruse the unescorted road

My poetics challenge ”Literary Alchemy with Laurie Lee” – converting his prose to a poem of one’s own, though under the influence of Lee as poet.

42 Comments on “one for the road

  1. Those hedgerows infused with flower are very Laurie Lee. I’m afraid I forgot all about trying to use his style in the effort to get a quatrain out of it.

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  2. A wonderful illustration for the prompt…I like your line /half blind I strode, indifferent to the closing episode. Reading your examples of Lee’s work, i found no quatrains, but I did tune in to his sense of style. I went with #1 example.

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  3. “hedgerows infused with flower dispensed a nosegay nuance” is such a beautiful line. The last stanza is amazing, how you put it together, and heartrending.

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  4. That last stanza made my heart ache. The header image at first sight so benign – a bend in the road – but an ‘unescorted road’.

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    • thank you for your understanding Tish – yes this poem took a different turn and I followed where it took me – back to what is evidently still quite raw so that summer beauty is especially poignant

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  5. An exhurberant stroll with you, Laura, but sad when “progress” destroys natural beauty of remote roads.

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  6. This is a beautiful challenge and response Laura, thank you. I love walking through that unescorted road and specially the sounds of this part:

    summer birds offering up melliferous melodies
    unruffled by our fitful footsteps’ rise and falls

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  7. “hedgerows infused with flower dispensed a nosegay nuance”…Aah…the beauty of it ! I walked side by side with you. Thank you for taking us there. The close is deeply moving and there’s a sense of inviting freedom there. Beautiful.

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  8. Oh, well done, Laura! I especially love the impact of your closing line.

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  9. My goodness this is good! ❤️ Especially love; “wild sighing roses cast petals in the heat.” 😀

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