She's peppermint pink
like seaside rock
a hot sugar boiler
as sickly sweet 
as fast junk food 
as thick white icing
on the Christmas cake

arm candy, eye candy
beauty in confection
her heroin looks 
hook all you
sucrose addicts
acid droppers
horse dopers

chic carved cheeks 
chopped blonde locks
a glutton for your glances
honeyed looks from strangers
and those she bestows
when the appeal
of candied peel
wears thin
as sugar-coating

peppermint pink 
like seaside rock
her name remains
right down
to the last
sticky
bite

27 thoughts on “Candid”

1. Love those chic carved cheeks! This is such a stunning, stunning rendition, Laura 😀 Thank you so much for adding your voice to the prompt 💝💝

   1. thank you Sanaa – especially as was unsure I had understood the prompt correctly

2. She sounds like she is doing the best she can with her looks… love the way you repeat and hammer in what you see, and I think I can almost see all the darkness she carries inside. It made me think of this line:

   And I don’t like these drugs that keep you thin
   I don’t like what happened to my sister

   From

   1. one of my favourite songs of his

3. Those heroin looks….this poem has a superb rhythm…somehow I see it as a Stranglers type song, urgently sung, with guitar, organ and drum..or perhaps even sung by Iggy Pop…so good…

   1. I like the idea of a Stranglers song Ain – glad you can hear something musical here!

4. Good for her sge grows old sweetly

   Much love

   1. not sure how well she will mature!

5. Enough to make your fillings scream…

   1. indeed!

6. I missed the prompt yesterday, Is this one writing to it? I loved it, but don’t find much Carroll in it. No matter, it is clever and fun.

   1. this was part 2 of the prompt – the Carroll did not gel

7. So beautiful. My brain is fogged with fatigue, so I’ll have to come back later for a more thorough re-read, but I love this!

   1. thanks for visiting Lucy

8. what a tasty read this is, I can picture this woman, we probably all know a girl like this! 😆

   1. don’t we just – the prompt helped my inner cat!

9. Such a sinfully sweet write!

   1. ahh yes you spotted the sinful bit

10. Sounds like a fun Friday night date, and brought back memories of candy rock too.

    1. either that or Saturday night Sunday morning!

11. A sweetly delicious poem!

    1. than you Dwight

       1. You are welcome!

12. Wow – this makes sweets seem kinda scary to me! 🙂

    1. that might just save you 😉

       1. Hahaha

13. This rocks with style and language, Laura!

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