first I was just
a wandering stray
stumbled across stubble
broke a hock on the rocky ground
where seeds dried to husks
finally fled the fold
that took in ingenues
silly and sacrificial

even with a flock of one, Lord
you're always the shepherd

31 thoughts on “An errant ewe”

1. Nicely done, Laura!

   1. thank you Kim

2. LOVE this, and so true. Beautiful, Laura.

   1. thanks for such appreciation De and for hosting our fold of poets this time!

3. I love those final lines… really good.

   1. many thanks Bjorn – a couplet works well as an ending

4. The final couplet is surprising. I like your use of internal rhyme and alliteration.

   1. a good way to end then

5. Beautifully crafted, Laura!

   1. many thanks Merril

      1. You’re welcome, Laura!

6. I think it resembles a ship.⛵️

   1. how surprising though now I think that the title would make a good name for a boat

7. A very nice write! Great use of the prompt.

   1. many thanks Dwight

8. It’s a rough world either in a flock or struggling alone. I think the errant ewe is wise in following the shepherd whose “rod and staff comfort.” Deft use of alliteration and assonance.

   1. I prefer that to straight rhyme so thank you for noticing Lisa

      1. You’re very welcome.

9. The right one is much more meaningful than the wrong crowd. (K)

   1. so true!

10. Truth! Well said Laura. I enjoyed your quadrille very much.

    1. thank you for your appreciation Carol

11. Vapid ingenues be gone!!! Beautifully penned quadrille.

    1. ingenues are food for wolves

12. Amazing end lines.

    Much💛love

    1. I knew you might like those 😉

13. Great alliterative beat. Loved the sound of ‘broke a hock on the rocky ground.’ Well done.

    1. your feedback on the beat of this poem is most welcome – thank you

14. This piece has such a wonderful flow to it…

    Much love,
    David

    1. thanks David – now you mention it, it reads like the flow of confession

       1. Yes!

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