Hailed like a returning hero yet in itself Spring suffuses shyly. No ballyhoo debut but wave on showering wave it leaves the winter shelf revealing to our naked eyes, as lamplight in a cave And long before the vert outburst a movement so discreet, so nearly still we almost always miss the switch. First seen when brown departs below the distant hill for only later does the Spring make haste. The sauntering child of April starts its run the winter dead are weighed and laid to waste and sole survivors suckle on the sow of sun
The sea runs back against itselfJohn Betjeman – extract of “Winter Seascape“
With scarcely time for breaking wave
To cannonade a slatey shelf
And thunder under in a cave.
Before the next can fully burst
The headwind, blowing harder still,
Smooths it to what it was at first –
A slowly rolling water-hill.
Against the breeze the breakers haste,
Against the tide their ridges run
And all the sea’s a dappled waste
Criss-crossing underneath the sun….
For my MTB Critique and Craft prompt “Take a four line alternate rhyme scheme– it’s a steal” we are lifting alternate end rhymes (ABAB,CDCD,EFEF etc) from a published poet (or an earlier one of our own) and recreating a poem that breaks the predictable rhythm of rhyme. I took John Betjeman’s “Winter Seascape“
Poetry styles Ae Freslighe and The Russell also use this rhyme formation and are a further optional challenge.
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