where the bay bends westward
a pincered peninsula promenades
its dawn to dusky sea-side shows
shifting sequences of scenery
sculpted by wind and curling cumuli
groynes rupture crook-backed breakers
wrenching precious grains
from children of the sand castle
and lovers still lying in knots

24 thoughts on “the bay”

1. I see you have a sandcastle too!

   I find the alliteration in ‘a pincered peninsula promenades’ so effective, I’m puffing along the promenade with you! I also love the ‘dawn to dusky sea-side shows’ and immediately think of Punch and Judy and bathing beauties – I posted a poem about them a while back. Why are we so immersed in the seaside? I love this, Laura!

   1. what a lovely comment Kim – how could akismet mistake this for spam? many many thanks – belated but meant!

2. LOVE that collective word for clouds…and your use of alliteration here is wonderful!

   1. Thank you! I like curling my tongue around alliteration 🙂

3. …children of the sand castles and lovers still lying in knots….smiling I am! 🙂

   1. Glad to add a twist of happy new year Lillian

4. I absolutely adore imagining and reading an image of peninsula promenading. Trying to imagine that is also very inspiring, both humorous and deep. Loved the poem!

   1. 😉 personifying the peninsula in verb – thank you

5. Wonderful usage of alliteration ❤️

   1. It tends to be my forté – even without intention 🙂

6. The imagery is wonderful, as is the great use of alliteration.

   1. Am moved to words by images 😉

7. There’s something dreamy about this. Love the alliteration, too.

   1. Pleased that you heard the dreamy element 😀

8. Love the scenary unfolding with:

   shifting sequences of scenery
   sculpted by wind and curling cumuli

   Did you check my latest email to you? Best regards ~

   1. The image is a shot in time but words move the scenery – thank you Grace but did not receive an email. Contacted you with my latest email address just in case

9. I liked the idea of the groynes wrenching the precious grains.

   1. Ah I figured it read a little confusingly – were it not for the groynes the sands would be swept by the waters

10. Beautiful imagery and wordsmithery! Dreamy…

    1. Ah thank you Beth and Happy New Year – must come and see how your winter garden is!

11. All beautifully described, and I particularly love the lovers lying in knots!

    1. thank you Rosemary – struggled with that last line but in the end felt the lover’s knot tied it off!

12. Curly bendy aliteration…lovely. Happy New Year.

    1. And to you too Paul -with a flourish of thank yous

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