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pause for thought
Does it matter one insignificant jot
that in that late and hot
sybaritic summer, the rot set?
But then weren’t we just a pair
of overripe plums…daring
to fall further than we cared?
What would have been the outcome
had we at least begun – with blossom?
Do you still possess my pitiful poesies?
Or muse, like me, on these meddlesome memories?
Is it awkward and mildly mawkish to make the inquiry?
Am I stuck in reverse with this retrospective query?
Do ponderings always dredge the sludge of years?
Questions are evidently made for ears
– are the marks not fashioned so?
Björn invites us to makes pauses in our poetry with the dVerse prompt: Meet the Bar with Silence
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I find questions so much more interesting than answers… also love those little pauses in thought… it would be great to hear a recording of this as well, but I really find those pauses I think.
Love the thought of being overripe before you bloom… a great metaphor for those relationships that are over before they really begin.
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thank you for this feedback Bjorn – your prompt was so well illustrated and gave pause for thought! The use of the question mark is a powerful silencer especially when there are no answers
p.s. I keep thinking of recording but the techno effort holds me back
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Laura your poem is wonderful with its circular musings and the pauses are inserted so subtly that we miss it, which is the mark of great poetry!
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What a lovely comment Jilly. I like your perception of circular musings – endless questions like fish rising silently to the bait!
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I love this Laura, even though it is mulled in cider tart. For every thing there is a season (of silence)
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‘Cider tart’ – most perfectly envisaged – maybe mixed with a little plum brandy?
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Best mix for some silences
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This is very well written. I love the word sybaritic, the comparison with the two overripe plums, and the rhymes.
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Thank you – it’s a great word full of suggestion. And thanks for noticing – I do not often rhyme.
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Every question certainly made me pause for thought. The use of question marks is brilliant!
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Just how I intended Vivian – so thank-you. The questions should be read as thoughts that come intermittently
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Great poem–very clever lines and thoughts here (and I mean clever in a good way!) That last comparison of ears with question marks is terrific!
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Glad you spotted the suggestion and many thanks for a very nice comment
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I liked this central couplet: “Do you still possess my pitiful poesies?
Or muse, like me, on these meddlesome memories?” The watercolor is also beautiful.
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Thank you -was not quite sure with that couplet – composed the photoart after I finished the poem on this one
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“Just a pair of overripe plums” — ha! Now that imagery will stick with me. Memories are powerful. So is your poetry!
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thank you Beth 🙂 do you have an orchard I wonder?!
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Sometimes questions are answered more from the silent pauses than from words. Nice work!
Dwight
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Well said! Nice comment – thank-you
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Those question marks really DO look like ears! I don’t think I’d ever thought of that before!
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Only spotted the connection after repetitive questioning!
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