the Persian buttercup
convoluted origami on a wispy, wiry stem
petal-packed - and when turbanned twice-over
barely able to brandish the prettiest pre-eminence
to our eulogizing gaze 

precocious pinks or gorgeous gaudy citrus
but surely floristry's monstrosity for bees
but where this Asian native meets Aegean sea
it inclines more to poppy and anemone
than paper powder-puff

35 thoughts on “powder puff”

1. I love ranunculus – petal-packed they are!

   1. me too though the native forms are magnificently modest

2. Aah, poetry about my favourite flowers and lovely picture to go with it – beautiful.

   1. And I thought of your Friday Flowers when I wrote this …<3
      https://throughalaywomanslens.wordpress.com/2017/12/29/friday-flowers-197/

      1. *blushing* 🙂

3. Wonderful metaphor and, as always, your word play is enchanting!

   1. I really appreciate your encouraging comments Jilly – thank you!

4. Love how you play with phrases and words to describe this flower….

   1. thanks Donna – Ranunculus are so light-hearted!

5. I also like the word play here. Pulls me in, helps me to “see” what you are saying. Great job!

   Elizabeth

   1. finding the meaning in visuals – there’s the trick of it. A great prompt from you – thank you Elizabeth

6. Great imagery – i loved every sense you gave us

   1. What a nice comment – thank you!

7. love your description of this pretty flower, especially after viewing the pictures (I wasn’t familiar with it). Within your lines I especially like “floristry’s monstrosity for bees” 🙂

   1. I think the bees would agree – these doubles hide their centres in origami!

8. Convoluted origami sets this up so well. A wonderfully floral piece.

   1. Many thanks Paul – glad it came across as floral rather than flowery!

9. I so admire the way you have described the flower in the opening stanza – in one complete sentence. Excellent writing.

   1. Really appreciate your words Kerry

10. even the Bard would pardon the misdirected line – I adore that!

    1. Could not help but re-phrase Shakespeare in that moment Margaret

11. Love this especially; “shall I compare thee to a summer cabbage rose?” 💜

    1. It is so like a cabbage rose but “thou art more lovely” – thanks Sanaa

12. I love the phrases ‘convoluted origami on a wispy, wiry stem’ and ‘turbanned twice-over’!

    1. Thank you Kim – it’s not quite how florist’s describe it but the poet takes liberties 😉

13. “our eulogizing gaze” …. Nice!!!

    Thanks for the flower link

    much love…

    1. It was the g’s I enjoyed writing here Gillena!

14. I think ‘turbanned twice-over’ is perfect for the Persian buttercup. This is such a perfect poem.

    1. perfectly lovely comment – thank you!

15. Lovely flower and lovely poem.

    1. thank you Rosemary

16. Your use of words is so beautifully deliberate and artful!

    1. thanks so much Ana – I deliberate for ages!

17. A floral feast! Love the artwork this matches.

    1. Thank you

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