powder puff

the Persian buttercup
convoluted origami on a wispy, wiry stem
petal-packed - and when turbanned twice-over
barely able to brandish the prettiest pre-eminence
to our eulogizing gaze 

precocious pinks or gorgeous gaudy citrus
but surely  floristry's monstrosity for bees
- shall I compare thee to a summer cabbage rose?
even the Bard would pardon the misdirected line
for where this Asian native meets Aegean sea
it inclines more to poppy and anemone
than paper powder-puff

Day 16 of NaPoWriMo 2018 and at ‘Women in Waiting’, Elizabeth has  offered up the prompt: paper.  Almost the first thing that came to mind were paper/ papery flowers – and flowers seem to be on my mind whatever the WiW prompt – see Wild and White

35 thoughts on “powder puff

    1. I really appreciate your encouraging comments Jilly – thank you!

    1. finding the meaning in visuals – there’s the trick of it. A great prompt from you – thank you Elizabeth

  1. love your description of this pretty flower, especially after viewing the pictures (I wasn’t familiar with it). Within your lines I especially like “floristry’s monstrosity for bees” 🙂

    1. I think the bees would agree – these doubles hide their centres in origami!

    1. Many thanks Paul – glad it came across as floral rather than flowery!

  2. I so admire the way you have described the flower in the opening stanza – in one complete sentence. Excellent writing.

    1. Could not help but re-phrase Shakespeare in that moment Margaret

  3. Love this especially; “shall I compare thee to a summer cabbage rose?” 💜

    1. It is so like a cabbage rose but “thou art more lovely” – thanks Sanaa

    1. Thank you Kim – it’s not quite how florist’s describe it but the poet takes liberties 😉

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