powder puff

photoart & poem – ©2018 Laura Granby

the Persian buttercup
convoluted origami on a wispy, wiry stem
petal-packed – and when turbanned twice-over
barely able to brandish the prettiest pre-eminence
to our eulogizing gaze

precocious pinks or gorgeous gaudy citrus
but surely  floristry’s monstrosity for bees
– shall I compare thee to a summer cabbage rose?
even the Bard would pardon the misdirected line
for where this Asian native meets Aegean sea*
it inclines more to poppy and anenome
than paper powder-puff

*see Flowers of Crete: Ranunculus asicaticus

Day 16 of NaPoWriMo 2018 and at ‘Women in Waiting’, Elizabeth has  offered up the prompt: paper.  Almost the first thing that came to mind were paper/ papery flowers – and flowers seem to be on my mind whatever the WiW prompt – see Wild and White

35 Comments on “powder puff

  1. Aah, poetry about my favourite flowers and lovely picture to go with it – beautiful.

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    • I really appreciate your encouraging comments Jilly – thank you!

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    • thanks Donna – Ranunculus are so light-hearted!

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  2. I also like the word play here. Pulls me in, helps me to “see” what you are saying. Great job!

    Elizabeth

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    • finding the meaning in visuals – there’s the trick of it. A great prompt from you – thank you Elizabeth

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  3. love your description of this pretty flower, especially after viewing the pictures (I wasn’t familiar with it). Within your lines I especially like “floristry’s monstrosity for bees” 🙂

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    • I think the bees would agree – these doubles hide their centres in origami!

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    • Many thanks Paul – glad it came across as floral rather than flowery!

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  4. I so admire the way you have described the flower in the opening stanza – in one complete sentence. Excellent writing.

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    • Could not help but re-phrase Shakespeare in that moment Margaret

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  5. Love this especially; “shall I compare thee to a summer cabbage rose?” 💜

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    • It is so like a cabbage rose but “thou art more lovely” – thanks Sanaa

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  6. I love the phrases ‘convoluted origami on a wispy, wiry stem’ and ‘turbanned twice-over’!

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    • Thank you Kim – it’s not quite how florist’s describe it but the poet takes liberties 😉

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    • It was the g’s I enjoyed writing here Gillena!

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  7. I think ‘turbanned twice-over’ is perfect for the Persian buttercup. This is such a perfect poem.

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    • perfectly lovely comment – thank you!

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