That sail The elemental center For home, For swallows and household fires That father and husband's longing That love of order In every gull's outcry As the dialect names of skies For the sea-wanderer The fields are evenings long The conclusions of exhausted surf In the high right hand of Ireland.
Sea Grapes ~ Derek Walton
That sailwhich leans on light,tired of islands,
a schooner beating up the Caribbean
for home,could be Odysseus,
home-bound on the Aegean;
that father and husband’s
longing,under gnarled sour grapes, is
like the adulterer hearing Nausicaa’s name
in every gull’s outcry.This brings nobody peace. The ancient war
between obsession and responsibility
will never finish and has been the same
for the sea-wandereror the one on shore
now wriggling on his sandals to walk home,
since Troy sighed its last flame,and the blind giant’s boulder heaved the troughthe conclusions of exhausted surf.
from whose groundswell the great hexameters come
toThe classics can console. But not enough.
Deep Ulster ~ Harry Clifton
It was there, the elemental center,All the time. Eternally present, repeating itself
Like seasons, where the times and dates
For swallows and household firesare written down,The grouse are counted, the quotas of stocked rainbows.that love of order
All, for its own sake.as the dialect names of skies
Only the hill-farms, and the high sheep country
Above politics—the enormous relief
Up there,Return, along with their clouds, and the old knowledge
Opens the mind again. To dream, to just potter
In the yard, to fiddle with local stationsIn the kitchen, where news that is no news
Finally, at last, fills up the years
With pure existence. Lit from beneath
The fields are evenings long,the tree by the house…
In a state plantationNowhere but here
In the high right hand of Ireland, do the weather fronts
Give way so slowly, to such ambivalent light.
Joining dVerse’s Open Link Night with this cento/patchwork poem of alternate lines from ‘Sea Grapes’ by Derek Walcott & Harry Clifton’s ‘Deep Ulster’. Title taken from ‘Sea Grapes’
I love what you’ve created with found lines from both poems.
thank you Linda – thisOLN was my first foray
I admire the new found poem, and love the writing process of erasing from 2 poems. Beautiful. Hope we can use this process in one of our sessions.
many thanks Grace – I have this earmarked for one of the MTBs
Love those last two lines, this is so original! 👏👏
was so pleased at how they melded Tricia
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interesting idea for creating a new poem. the new poem is a good read.
it is an interesting exercise – also encourages us to read and really study some poems
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the view of land for the sailor is very different than the view of the land for the landlubber. It’s a fun exercise and satisfying to put a poem together the way you did, from others’
I guess they are both islanders!
Well inspired and well done.
many thanks Ken – I chose them not looking for a match but because I love both the poems
Beautifully done Laura, I haven;t come across this approach before… Very stimulating – thank you…
its one of ‘Found’ styles of poetry Scott you’d probably enjoy – a worthwhile ‘exercise’ in its own right/write!
Very evocative and melancholic, Laura. You’ve found a beautiful treasure.
the synthesis was a treasure indeed
Beautiful!
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OH… I feel this poem, the contentment of home and the longing we always have for it no matter how far flung we are form it… I’d love to see what people would come up with in a found poem given two poems as a prompt.
you certainly honed in on the feelings both poems evoke, even in their synthesis.
p.s. Look out then for my MTB prompt in the quite near future
A beautiful quilt…”the dialect names of skies “–so evocative. (K)
very nice notion K
oh that’s nice! love the sounds, and that last stanza… very complete, very clever. well done.
thank you Phillip – I’m careful not to use too much or too many words of the original authors but they made great sailing mates