I will not beg to differ - for this kind of love is not a choice or feast of some Abigail prudent as a dove-grey queen Regaled in that red dress nagging rag to a rampant bull as a priori consent to tread the arena like a minotaur, full tilt In finality of twilight the pact solidified versions of connubial underpinning conquest and so the chalice broke
Then why not make an offer your heart on a plate not a severed head predicating ways out of the web hesitant on the threshold Right across the room, I'd waved that first gesture misconstrued as permit for the rabbit hole dusted, dazed, to slip without regard for tenderness Beneath tenebrous trees, you understood in whispers, tendering plans to count up many moons leaving fate to fathom in the stars with tribute paid to Venus
For my MTB prompt: Cleaving to Antonyms in Contrapuntal Lines we are choosing one of the given paired opposites as prompt words for two poems that can be read individually as well as interwoven as one larger composition, either in Contrapuntal dialogue, Cleaved together or reversed as Palindrome. I have chosen Beg/Offer and cleaved the poem(s) across the lines.
What a great word bifurcation is, as is tenebrous! I love the contrasts I the lines:
‘Regaled in that red dress
nagging rag to a rampant bull ‘
and
‘your heart on a plate
not a severed head’
Hooray for cleaving!
hooray indeed once the struggle to write poetry that can be read both down and across -the opposite pairings helped give the poems dialogue
I love how the two join, despite any misconstruings. Beautiful and sexy too!
glad you spotted that Lisa – touched on the madonna/magdalen oppositional split –
What a gorgeous symphony of words, Laura.
Wonderfully done, all three ways!
thank you for this ovation! x
You’re very welcome!
Very nice work, Laura.
thank you
You are welcome!
Nice one Laura
Much💜love
many thanks
I really like the interplay of the two first stanzas.
many thanks Maria – the interplay was challenging especially to make two voices also read as one
I read each poem on my tablet, but had to visit the desktop to see it as a cleave and experience both at once–wordpress does not format well on a tablet for some reason. I especially like the second set with the red dress and bull imagery. Red is such a potent color. (K)
I saw that too on my iPhone! red an evocative colour for me and the contrast with the dove grey is a potent one
Yes it is.
Totally gorgeous. Xoxo
❤
Wonderful. I think I managed to read this four separate ways and they all worked. Delightful phrasing throughout.
Very belated thanks (comment waiting approval) for stopping by to read and leaving such encouraging words Paul – good to see you back at dVerse if only fleetingly
My pleasure. I think I will be dipping in here and there, time permitting.
You’ve got a great vocab, I had to google many words but it was worth it! Nice contrast between two stanzas.
nice to know you bothered to expand your vocabulary too (especially as/if not your first language so even more kudos to you)
Love the undercurrents throughout and those closing lines! A superb write, Laura, and a perfect cleave poem.
many thanks for your very encouraging comment
My pleasure.
Beautiful writing. I really love “dove-grey queen” and “tenebrous trees”