As a bird

gull in free flight
photoart and poem – © 2017 Laura Granby

free verse
dismisses regimental rhyme
overrules page forms
lets accentuals loose
liquid quicksilver
lava flow
– but no-
dry dip-pen scratchings
scuttle like crabs off sandpaper
scatter almost scatologically
cerebration, constipation
Try Harder! – now there’s the strain
bumbling stumbling block
I just – must – let – go

44 words trying to fly off the page  for De’s  Quadrille: Free

35 Comments on “As a bird

  1. Oh, man do I ever love this:
    “dry dip-pen scratchings
    scuttle like crabs off sandpaper”

    Those crabby, crabby words. More of these than birds for me, lately. Well done, Laura. Such strong images here.

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  2. I too love the scuttling crabs. The words do truly run away from your brain just when you need them most. The images are strong and sure.

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  3. Wonderfully flitty dance with words…sums up perfectly the frustration of trying to find flow when trying never works.

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  4. LOVE this….and yes, sometimes that poetic muse is sooooo hard to come by….and if we just let loose, it pops in place. Especially love these lines
    “dry dip-pen scratchings
    scuttle like crabs off sandpaper”

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  5. Oh, this is sublime! Like the others, I adore your scuttling crabs! The whole poem is a rock wrapped in silk, falling on my head!

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  6. I love this, Laura! I especially like:
    ‘dry dip-pen scratchings
    scuttle like crabs off sandpaper
    scatter almost scatologically’ –
    wonderful sound effects!

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  7. Ahah! I like your take on this, Laura. Completely summarizes the journey of a writer.

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  8. Lot’s of fun here – scuttling crabs, constipation – and I could hear the instruction – ‘try harder’. Very nice. Thank you.

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  9. I know that feeling. L love how the scratchy crabs create the sound of a scratchy pen, and I like your bumbling, stumbling block. Lots of lovely wordplay.

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  10. Scatological. Another word learned from your blog. Wonder where and when I will be able to use it 😀

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