Young April hushed the convent door.
Tell them I have gladly gone 
twirled by the wind with a song 

of bliss. My pass a passion ticket spent 
swelled in the last wave of the night
playful at the waterline. Ere I crept

to other men, spirits of the air
that ring, girdled with dust of cake
and cup. Some were the ache

of autumn nights, shaken as roses
for my late delight. Every lover 
I could be; but I put no love

on the marriage tree.

18 thoughts on “Sham acumen”

1. I agree that AI is not poetically worthwhile, Laura. I like unique poems that don’t bear traces of other poets, that don’t force rhymes, and make some sense. I love your title. These are my favourite lines:
   ‘… Some were the ache
   of autumn nights, shaken as roses
   for my late delight.’

   1. the title at least excused the poetry but thank you for picking some of the better lines

2. Oh I think you did great, and I can understand that it took a lot of editing.

   1. it was not easy and thank you for the prompt but for now at least our Muse can rest assured

3. Love the title, Laura, and the poem wants to make sense doesn’t it. I do like the line, “I put no love on the marriage tree.”

   1. only if its forced to with some strong edits 😉

4. Enjoyed reading your post….and most especially your comment at the end, which made me smile!
   “I am rather pleased that AI has not proven poetically worthwhile after all!”

   1. thank you Lillian – the competition is not that good …so far!

5. I love what you did here specially with the line breaks of song/bliss and ache/of autumn nights, and that last line is just stunning. Well I am glad that AI is not so skillful after all.

   1. many thanks Grace – AI threw up some good lines from the poetry source but they did seem to be too stultified without the line breaks –

6. This is absolutely exquisite, Laura! 😍 I can see glimpses of Lowell here ,, but your voice shines through and amazes with its use of language – so I love this part; “Some were the ache of autumn nights, shaken as roses for my late delight.” ❤️❤️❤️

   1. thank you Sanaa -one of my fave lines too as combo of AI source and what it threw up in me!

7. I think you did a good job with it. The ending made me smile. (K)

   1. that’s good to hear as it was not as easy as it seemed at first

8. gosh. as you said, a learning experience.

   1. indeed – not one I will return to either

9. I don’t know if you know this Laura, I just found out today. Our friend and fellow poet Glenn Butkus passed away last Friday the 17th. I will miss his bold ways. Rest in peace Glenn.🕊

   1. thank you Rob – yes I do now and left condolences. Bold and strong is how best describes his poetry and a generous man in our community

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