Cocktails at six, their first clink of a toast
almost spilling both
So sticky, so green, such a Belle Époque sheen
she'd seen in a French magazine
Peppery, spicy, yet enticingly sweet
a meeting, indiscreet
Her weakness Martini, his a Manhattan
two comme il faut olives, one green and one black
Absurd how their hands lingered over the snacks
that contact, electric
Just a couple of olives, some discarded pits
- just how they left it.
For Grace’s MTB prompt we are Breaking the Couple – our writing explores the different ways couplet lines can mismatch, either disrupting rhyme, altering meter or adding discontinuity
Title is a line from Stephen Sandy’s poem: Modest Proposals
I like the way you had couplets for a couple… what a great way to do it in terms of those drinks (and yes the pits left afterward)
thanks Bjorn the way the two lines bounce off each other evoked a couple for me
I love character sketch of the olives and his/hers. The meeting so indiscreet, the verses roll off effortlessly. Thank you Laura.
many thanks Grace and for this prompt which I shall return to as I become more au fait with writing thus –
Oh yes, Laura, a couple’s couplet – and thanks for the olives! I especially love this jaunty couplet: ‘So sticky, so green, such a Belle Époque sheenshe’d seen in a French magazine’.
that was almost the exemplar of a rhyming couplet but I left it in as contrast with the broken ones
Oh, I love this, Laura!
It has that tongue firmly in cheek aura! 😉❤️
thanks Punam – the cocktails went to my head with this one!
Lol. My pleasure, Laura.
Nicely done, Laura 👍