PoetryPix
depictions by the rule of thirds; descriptions mostly freestyle words
humdrum hermit
moist pavements in tears and veiled
lamps sucked reflections from wet ground
I used to love the dark, sad evenings
moods of melancholy wrapped
the leafless landscape full of poetry
– now the cup was emptied
to the living heart of the world
Some erasure poetry lifted from Hermann Hesse’s novel – (see text Steppenwolf p19) for Victoria’s prompt:Look What I Found! dVerse MTB
and despite being a bit of a blog hermit this weekend am linking up with the Poetry Pantry
24 Comments on “humdrum hermit”
My Japanesque Garden
The emptiness all around touches the core. Beautiful, Laura. “moods of melancholy wrapped / the leafless landscape” Love this.
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Hesse’s heritage and travels gave the mystical touch of India to his writing
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Well done, Laura. I do erasure poems so poorly. Love …I used to love the dark, sad evenings / moods of melancholy wrapped / the leafless landscape full of poetry…
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have never tried this before Sarah but feel that it certainly needs a lyrical passage to begin with
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This is so gorgeous..❤️ every word.. every image.. here seems to cling to the conscience and beating of heart. *swooooon*❤️
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thank you – I love this novel ❤ Steppenwolf's adventure in his alter ego makes him swoon too
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Beautiful. I am hermiting, too….so happy to see you!
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hello Sherry – lets be happy hermits together!
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This is a gorgeous piece of erasure poetry… you really found the perfect book to write something new… especially love how you tied it together in the end,
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thank you Bjorn – happily I found a long and lyrical paragraph to erase a poem from
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I love the idea of lamps sucking reflections, a super write Laura.
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Hesse’s words – my erasure!
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Erasure poetry here? I am truly impressed! Hermann Hesse, I think, would have enjoyed!
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Hope he would see how much I tried to keep true to the hermit
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What a beautiful blackout poem. Absolutely brilliant extraction!
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Yes an interesting form to see what remains after the blackout
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Oh I do so love your images and your words have just the right feel to accompany the sad, melancholy, wet evening.
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For once the photoart followed the verse – thank you for looking and reading
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You mention this is your first time at this…that in itself is impressive…one hopes that you continue…
Elizabeth
https://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2017/10/29/in-present-moments/
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Thank you Elizabeth for the encouragement – shall try again
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lamps sucked reflections from wet ground” love that and another stunner “now the cup was emptied to the living heart of the world” Beautiful poem
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Thank you on behalf of Hermann Hesse
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Hi, I can only echo what others have said, really good read
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Glad you enjoyed Julian – have you read the book?
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