Outlook

A stray bare branch
raps against teary, dreary panes
I tap the barometer

rain-no-change its outlook
I’m looking out, a stir-crazy lady
gardener stuck in an indoor mire

mired in mud, daffodils
have raised swathes of souffle-lemon
I’ve a taste of things to come

Joining De in her 44 word count quadrille: Stir

36 thoughts on “Outlook

  1. Nice! stir crazy did come to mind but my poem had a mind of its own today

    much love…

  2. Lovely imagery here – ‘the swathes of soufflé’… – is a ripper – and the repetition of mire/mired across the stanzas is so clever – it’s like opening a window…terrific stuff.

    1. many thanks for this Peter – I especially like your ‘opening a window’ given the cloistered atmosphere of the first 2 stanzas- just as I hoped the poem sounded

    1. thanks Victoria -I wanted something different to yellow and souffle came to mind especially with all that yellow now rising out of the ground 😉
      p.s. Yay! we are united in our desire to get out there and get our hands dirty again

  3. I love this part best:

    mired in mud, daffodils
    have raised swathes of souffle-lemon
    I’ve a taste of things to come

    Spring season is glorious!

  4. So glad those daffodils, and the crocus and heather, go about their business blooming even when we can’t get out into the garden. Nice capture of the feeling of being stir-crazy.

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