Swarms of garden gazers
gleefully swoop on bold bedding, right-royal roses,
past pools of voluptuous vegetation, they stream
along water features for refreshments
As solitary bee, I skulk behind bamboo
conjure haikus and listen to the quivering, quaking stems
when human hubbub trails away
Just 44 words for De’s quadrille prompt: Quiver
33 thoughts on “A garden visit”
I love this presence in the quivering bamboo capable of conjuring haiku
no better place
Oh, that last stanza is so wonderful! The sounds in bamboo/haiku…and the image created. Just stunning.
many thanks De for an inspired and inspiring prompt – the Muse finally came through
Incredible alliteration – great!
am a lover of lines like that – thank you
That last stanza is amazing Laura!
Glad you liked it – thank you
I like the attention paid to the “quivering, quaking stems”.
Could think of no other place for the prompt
Killer second stanza, love the bee’s POV, helping us to be even more aware of what goes on beneath our feet, and in the tall grass.
Thank you – A nice eco perspective I had not seen
I love the perspective of your quadrille, Laura, and the image of a bee conjuring haiku while humans create a hubbub in the bamboo!
That is one perspective or is it the poet escaping the crowds to write haiku
The second one is me! I spend most mornings avoiding people and writing haiku!
What a wise way to spend your time
Just read it again, but this time aloud. Loving the sounds in this. That human hubbub being one. The alliteration is wonderful.
Thank you for listening and hearing all the hubbub Lilian
Oh, my! I love this bee perspective.
but it is a human one if you perceive as as like 😉
The ending 3 lines made me smile. Love that perspective Laura.
thank you Grace –
Some gardens are for solitary bees only. Nice poem!
and humans that prefer their own company
Crowd scenes in quiet gardens are not my favourite place either. Oh, to be a bee, and just get on with something useful.
hence I creep behind the bamboo and listen to the silence after the hubbub has passed
Yes, we have to wait for the rest to leave us – quiet gardens are wonderful. And I prefer photos with no strangers…
Love the two different moods of the swarm and the solitary and how your use of words changes for each ‘right royal roses’ verses your beautiful (as much mentioned) bamboo/conjure haiku. Truly beautiful. Quiver inspired you to bees and me to pregnant cats 🙄
very well observed and spot on – deliberate use of swarm/people and solitary/me/poet.
p.s. maybe our inspiration for quiver has something to do with milk and honey
Ah, this line:
“listen to the quivering, quaking stems…”
I see some Japanese brush strokes in that – thanks Frank
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